Do not go gentle into that good night

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Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by Lambuzhao » 06 Jun 2015 09:02

Do not go gentle into that good night,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

-Dylan Thomas


:con: Rozwi

Lod hotrea θo ʕeu kaχuboa vu yuepa
PRP evening-ACC DIST good discord=PRP PROHIB go-IMPTV
Do not go gentle into that good night

okaigi ʕatmoa deotaran roršatimpa
PRP die<NMLZ>ABL light-GEN <AUG>fight-IMPTV
Rage, rage against the dying of the light
Spoiler:
If you want to hear a not bad approximation of the pronunciation
copypasta this

lod jotrea zo eu kajuboa vu yuepá.
okaigui atmoa deotarán rorsatimpá.



into this website
http://imtranslator.net/translate-and-s ... k/spanish/

and press 'Speak Spanish'

BTW the voice sounds exactly like me [xP]

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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by Lao Kou » 06 Jun 2015 13:49

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Fenfe la vö shekhsöv zçalíkfoshkökhöv helkekhöv preshja'u hünadínzdanez,
2SG-NOM.NEG AUX.PRES DEF.NEG night-LOC.NEG good-LOC.NEG that-LOC.NEG gentle-ADV walk.in-IMP
Do not go gentle into that good night,

Öçek la hüshkél, chü dhörhaksüt chí völsís hüshkél.
2SG-NOM AUX.PRES rebuke-IMP, DEF vanishing-ACC DEF light-GEN rebuke-IMP
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

-Taumas Dilönsan
-Dylan Thomas
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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by AndrewTheConlanger » 06 Jun 2015 18:00

Also:
"Don't go gentle into the good night; rage on against the dying sun."
-Somebody to Die For, by Hurts

Sxeus yryelcekxo sleumuivu sele: krykheus aa fleyi cerolimzu.
imp-go-pres-pfv-act-indic adv.kept-away night.com good fight.pres-pfv-act-indic against sun-obl kill.pfv-pass-part
Don't go away from the good night; fight on against the being-killed sun.

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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by Iyionaku » 06 Jun 2015 20:11

:con: Yélian

Cinusicuras pèsvat parufairat,
[ˌkinʊsiˈkurəs ˈpɛsvɐt ˈpaːruˌf͡aɪrət]
NEG-gentle-come-2SG.IMP towards-DEM night-good

Ándegas, ándegas evan olkon o'taya.
[ˈandɛxəs ˈandɛxəs ˈɛvən ˈɔlkɔn oˈtaːʃaˈ]
rage-2SG.IMP rage-2SG.IMP against dead GEN-light
Wipe the glass. This is the usual way to start, even in the days, day and night, only a happy one.

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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by Lambuzhao » 07 Jun 2015 01:55

AndrewTheConlanger wrote:Also:
"Don't go gentle into the good night; rage on against the dying sun."
-Somebody to Die For, by Hurts

Sxeus yryelcekxo sleumuivu sele: krykheus aa fleyi cerolimzu.
imp-go-pres-pfv-act-indic adv.kept-away night.com good fight.pres-pfv-act-indic against sun-obl kill.pfv-pass-part
Don't go away from the good night; fight on against the being-killed sun.
[+1] :mrgreen:

That is AWESOME.

In Rozwi, the word deotar 'light' and dohtr 'sun' are related (and, technically, hotrea 'evening' is also related to dohtr.

I toyed with including a variant using the word for sun.

Now I can do it with wild abandon -


Lod hotrea θo ʕeu kaχuboa vu yuepa
PRP evening-ACC DIST good discord=PRP PROHIB go-IMPTV
Do not go gentle into that good night

okaigi ʕatmoa dohtran roršatimpa
PRP die<NMLZ>ABL light-GEN <AUG>fight-IMPTV
Rage, rage against the dying of the sun

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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by All4Ɇn » 08 Jun 2015 05:54

:con: Îçlo

Non va docile ĭn quella buona nocte,
[n̪on̪ vɑ d̪oˈt͡ʃiːl̪ɛ ən̪ ˈkweːl̪ä ˈbwoːn̪ä ˈn̪oːkt̪ɛ]

Sevǐ, sevǐ contra la morte della luxit
[s̪ɛˈvəː s̪ɛˈvəː ˈcoːn̪t̪rä l̪ä ˈmoːrt̪ɛ ˈd̪eːl̪ä ˈl̪uːks̪it̺]

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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by Lambuzhao » 09 Jun 2015 12:11

Lao Kou wrote:
Öçek la hüshkél, chü dhörhaksüt chí völsís hüshkél.
2SG-NOM AUX.PRES rebuke-IMP, DEF vanishing-ACC DEF light-GEN rebuke-IMP
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

-Taumas Dilönsan
-Dylan Thomas
I kno your verbs are usually clause-final anyway, but the initial hüshkél with the 'delayed' hüshkél at the end. In this way, the call to rage hits one like a flash of lightning, and then thunder rumbling.
[O.O]
A simply terrific poetic/stylistic/linguistic effect. [:'(] [<3]

And the fact that hüshkél looks sort of like :eng: 'hush' - almost exactly the opposite in meaning- what a great metacognitive effect as well.


Now that's what conlanging is about.
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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by Lao Kou » 09 Jun 2015 13:43

Lambuzhao wrote:
Lao Kou wrote:Öçek la hüshkél, chü dhörhaksüt chí völsís hüshkél.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
I know your verbs are usually clause-final anyway, but the initial hüshkél with the 'delayed' hüshkél at the end. In this way, the call to rage hits one like a flash of lightning, and then thunder rumbling.
[O.O]
A simply terrific poetic/stylistic/linguistic effect. [:'(] [<3]
So I'm a poet and dunnoit? [B)]

Thank you for the kind words, but I think you give me far too much credit here. I mean, where else you gonna go with an SOV translation for this? Any low thunder-rumbling going on I think can be attributed to why I get all gooey and éclair-like about SOV in the first place -- German subordinate clauses, Japanese... [<3] (front roundeds and SOV -- everything else is gravy)
And the fact that hüshkél looks sort of like :eng: 'hush' - almost exactly the opposite in meaning- what a great metacognitive effect as well.
For me, "shkél" is reminiscent of Geschreck and Geschrei, and then the imperative "hü-" is glommed on. Any metacognitive associations with "hush" are purely incidental, but hell, we'll take it. Yeah, you know the Mets? I own 'em. [B)]
Now that's what conlanging is about.
I won't dispute that. [:)]
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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by PTSnoop » 09 Jun 2015 20:12

Necthiøth:

Kia rui esia emáclu uelauphán eriøzmél;
[ kjá ʁúj ʔɪsjá ʔemáxlu welawpʰán ʔɪʁjɔʃmél ; ]
kie rui e-sie e-máclu ue-lau-phá-n e-riøznél;
NEG dark ADJ-4 ADJ-good into-2SG-IMP-BAD ADJ-unresisting ;

Do not go gentle into that good night,

Naicøslauphán, naicøslauphán uǿøføie engé kutai.
[ najxøslawpʰán , najxøslawpʰán wø:føjé ʔeŋé kútaj . ]
náicøz-lau-phá-n , náicøz-lau-phá-n uøffø-ie e-ngé kutai .
anger-2SG-IMP-BAD, anger-2SG-IMP-BAD die-for ADJ-light urge .

Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by Thakowsaizmu » 09 Jun 2015 21:12

Lambuzhao wrote:Do not go gentle into that good night,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
:epo:
Ne iru dolĉe en la bonan nokton tiun,
Koleregu, koleregu kontraŭ la ekmortanto de la lumo.


ne ir-u dolĉe en la bona-n nokto-n tiu-n kolereg-u kolereg-u kontraŭ la ek-mort-ant-o de la lumo.
NEG go-JUS gently in DEF good-ACC night-ACC that-ACC rage-JUS rage-JUS against DEF PERF-die-PROG-noun of DEF light

Or something... I just picked it back up last week.

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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by Wyrmtunge » 29 Jun 2015 12:33

Nie gąg mliodzo ję tą gudą natę,
wrzadzi, wrzadzi gażna dutę lites.


[ɳe gɔŋk ˈmlʲod͡zɔ jen tɔŋ ˈgudɔn ˈnatɛ͂,
ˈvʐad͡ʑi ˈvʐad͡ʑi ˈgaʐna ˈdutɛn ˈlitɛs]

not go.2SG-IMP gentle.ADV in DEM.ACC good.ACC night.ACC
rage.2SG-IMP rage.2SG-IMP against death.ACC light.GEN


"Do not go gentle into that good night,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light."

Proto-Germanic word-for-word comparison:
Ne* gang mildijô** in þǭ gōdōnų nahtų,
wraiþī, wraiþī gagina dauþų leuhtas.
Kniądz Dumłód wiot Upsale chań...

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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by druneragarsh » 11 Sep 2015 22:22

:con: Mira
Ika ŋemeh xirati čara joinura kurora
i-ka ŋeme-h xira-ti ča-ra joinu-ra kuro-ra
no-IMPERAT.2s go-CONN quiet-ADV this-ILL good-ILL night-ILL

Xoraka, xoraka lainen koram račara
xora-ka, xora-ka laine-n kora-m rača-ra
rage-IMPERAT.2s, rage-IMPERAT.2s light-GEN death-ACC against-ILL

Rača "against" is in the illative, since it is wanted that the recipient begin to rage against the dying of the light, thus entering the state of against-ness.
drúne, rá gárš
drun-VOC I.ERG read

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Re: Do not go gentle into that good night

Post by Aleks » 24 Sep 2015 21:31

Do not go gentle into that good night,
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

:con: Des Xeli
Dacený žitke blýs výn žare bună noačve
Fulie, fulie, proci des zuŗake xe des lumină


[dats'enɯ ʒit'ke blɪs vɪn ʒar'e bunə no'atʃve]
[fu'lie, fu'lie, protsi, des zum'rake ske des lu'mi'nə]

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